Lucy Pennykettle

It's great. Really, I like it. Umm, one thing though, at the end, in three months, I would be dang lucky if I had hair. It'll take about 4 months ...

Hello Fire, I'm glad you fixed your prologue. There were a couple things that stood out to me. I used to despise violence, not even able to harm a spider. ...

Hey Doom, I really like your story, there are a couple things to fix though. The name rang in my head. I've never heard it before, but it carried the ...

Not bad for a first time! Hello Dance, I'm Lucy. So, there were a couple things that caught my eye in this story. Some of my comment's might be from ...

Hey Audrey. I enjoyed reading your story. There were a few things that caught my eye though. I jumped I had been reading A Catcher in the Rye and was ...

Hello Vivos! Nice story, I really like it. So, I have a few things about your characters. Your main character and narrator is Elizabeth right? I'm having a hard time ...

Ha ha! Nice job Forest! :D I liked it a lot! I love your choice of words, and how people classify as creeps. The only thing I have personally against ...

I'm back again! This part is so sad! Let's go over it, shall we? “You must Ari, your Mother is waiting for you.” Okay, I know from personal stuff that ...

Hi GothicButterfly. Nice job on the story. You did really well. Once home I dragged myself through the front door, sleep taking hold of my body. “Hey Pumpkie!” Greeted my ...

:thud: Wow! I'm agreeing with Livia. That was AMAZING!! You really put your emotions in there. The short sentences were so simple, and yet you were able to put so ...

Hello GothicButterfly. Nice job with the story. There are a few things though that need to be fixed... The warm breeze whipped across my pale face, blowing my blond and ...

.... WOW!! Nice job! You really made the story flow. Awesome work. A couple minor details though... A steady rhythm of splish.slide.plip. I understand that the periods are like pauses, ...

Okey-dokey, I guess I'll be one to review this. I'm Lucy. Your story is coming along really well. I'll start out by talking about some of your characters. Hera Okay, ...